Opinions on my story? rate it and critisize?

It sounds good, alittle werid.. but i like it.. you hace a good story, throw its not something i'd read for my taste, adn it seems like your jumping a head of yourself a bit, but thats just me... but anyways other then that it sounds good. and idk bout spelling errors and that stuff cuz im not the greatest with it either.. but it sounds good...