I wrote a song, PLEASE take a look and help!!?? PLEASE!?

St. Anger - Oh My God! That (poem/song) just tore at my heart strings. You relly dug deep...I APPLAUD you. If I were to rate it on a scale of 1-10...I would give you a 9...Keep up the great work and good luck in all of your endeavors...EVERYONE will know your name!